torsdag den 5. november 2009

The Blue Vase I


“Are you sure it´s okay? I mean, perhaps she locked it because she doesn´t want us to to …” Chubby little Blomquist prattled nervously.

“Are we supposed to be sleuths, or what?” Jennings drawled while trying to insert another rusty key in the keyhole. He found one which seemed promising, but could not turn it around. He gave the old trunk an experimental kick. “Bobby Lou 1898” the faded gold letters said.

“I just …” Blomquist began when the next key suddenly did the trick. The lid of the old trunk creaked open, and the two boys took a step back into the shadows of the dusty attic.

They laughed sheepishly, and Jennings threw it wide open. “Is that … do you think that is …”

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As I plan to publish this story in an anthology soon, I have removed the public version.

Dorte Hummelshøj Jakobsen. 

12 kommentarer:

Margot Kinberg sagde ...

Oh, Dorte, I like this! I'm drawn in right away. How creative that you've chosen to have a couple of schoolboys find what I think, anyway, is a real body. I can't wait to see what comes next!

Dorte H sagde ...

Margot: I thought you would!
No matter what Indy says, I suspect you have some sense of humour ;D

Margot Kinberg sagde ...

Dorte - Thanks! I'll tell Indy what you said; she's gotten quite full of herself now that she's a "blog celebrity" ; ).

Elizabeth Spann Craig sagde ...

Bravo! Especially since your commenters were especially off-the-wall in their suggestions!

Lets hope these boys wash their hands. It could become a medical thriller!

Elizabeth
Mystery Writing is Murder

Dorte H sagde ...

Margot: I bet she has :D

Elizabeth: yes, it is the good side of these stories: I can always blame someone else if the result is far out ;)
In fact, I liked all the ideas my readers sent, but they were a bit difficult to integrate in ONE story.

Louise sagde ...

I like this a lot, Dorte, and I also felt like I wanted to know MORE about them and the dog and that mysterious residue. And the hand.

But I am not sure they should find a whole body (sans hand) just yet. Let them stumble around a bit more, perhaps finding other clues on their way?

R. T. sagde ...

Ah, the residue in the broken vase. That sounds rather familiar. In any event, well done! Now we wait until Saturday!

Dorte H sagde ...

Louise: I am really glad I have made you curious! See you on Saturday.

R.T. I did my best with that residue, and I think I have been able to include at least one idea from every contributor. And what that has done for my story - well, you´ll have to wait and see.

....Petty Witter sagde ...

Like with The Red Shoe, I'm already hooked/intrigued. Loved the start of this story. What is the residue? Where is the rest of the body? I suppose I'll have to wait until Saturday for the next instalment.

Dorte H sagde ...

Petty Witter: glad I have hooked you :D
And I am so glad I finished this story the other day so even if I am busy you can count on a new instalment tomorrow.

cathryngrant sagde ...

I don't know if they should find the whole body just yet either, but knowing you, we just *think* that's what Sherlock has found. Chilling!

I'm looking forward to the next installment.

Dorte H sagde ...

Cathryn: well, let´s see what they have found - or what the characters choose to tell us - later today.